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Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples

#people #noise #amount
Some research
suggest
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suggests
 that human
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that part of the central nervous system that includes all the higher nervous centers; enclosed within the skull; continuous with the spinal cord
brain
prion
 attracted towards negative headlines than a positive one. Apparently, our
brian
that part of the central nervous system that includes all the higher nervous centers; enclosed within the skull; continuous with the spinal cord
brain
Brian
brand
has negatively biased
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negatively biases
since
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for
 millions of years.
Therefore
, we often prefer to read negative news and facts. Plane crashes and earth
quacks
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quack
 happen
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 a fraction of
time whereas
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time, whereas
 good events often develop over a period of time. News about any natural disaster make us to think whether we are safe or need to act quickly in order to keep ourselves safe.People who have a final say often encourage to have a negative coverage. Wherever it is possible for the editors of newspapers to keep a balance between a positive, negative or neutral facts. Readers have to be informed that the human
have
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has
 a tendency to read negative news and teach them how to alleviate
this
. For
this
, the effect of bad news
on
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for
 people, and society should be taught at schools.
Grassroot
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Grassroots
 movement and social media can
redifine
give a new or different definition to
redefine
 the concept of newsworthiness.
This
 can, eventually, force news reporters to
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the concentration of attention or energy on something
focus
 on
more day
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a more day
 to day events that are locally significant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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