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Some think that governments should support retired people financially while others believe they should take care of themselves. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While it is often argued by some people that financial issues for the old age people should need to support by the local ministry whereas others take the view of that basic need for aged people by own means.My opinion is that it is better to offer help to older people and
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 essay will discuss about both views. One side of the argument, there are people who hold the position that basic necessity of retired people are taking care of themselves. The most compelling reason is that they no need to depend on their own children or local authority to support their daily life.
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 the children's marriage, they will be separated from them and live lonely Another reason for believing is that retired money will satisfy to lead their own life.
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, some of the savings money
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 useful for their future life. The Asian countries are prime examples, about 80% of the aged populations are tending to live separately. Despite above arguments, I am of the view that local governance gives more priority to the aged population. Indeed, one reason why I believe is that older generation people, mostly retire from their profession and spend the rest of activity lonely.
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, there is a shortage of monthly income and state could lend their hands for them.
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, many people do have medical complications as becoming older and older.
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, the medicines are quite expensive now a day's which is not affordable for them. To illustrate, the New York times published an article about the survival of elders in
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 contemporary era. In conclusion, while both views are held in the society and I strongly believe that government backing as much as needed for them.
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 is because of elders facing difficulties with lower annual income and medical expenses. Given
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 situation, it is recommended that in order to care for older people, ministry around the world should think about implementing
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement
  • financial support
  • social responsibility
  • comfortable and secure
  • reduces poverty
  • safety net
  • limited resources
  • fairness and equality
  • personal responsibility
  • independence
  • financial planning
  • saving
  • burden on the government
  • control over retirement
  • economic growth
  • private investment
  • combination of approaches
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