In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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In some nations, in spite of a decline in the number of severe offences, the citizens feel more threatened as compared to the past. The primary cause of

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phenomenon is the

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of re-offence by the ex-convicts and most viable solution is a public awareness campaign to deter

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problem. The major cause of

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threat is the probability of re-

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by the criminals because

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refuses to accept them and

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rejection is due to the stigma associated with these ex-prisoners.

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, due to their criminal record, they fail to get secure a better place neither at work nor in

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, it is more likely that they returned back to their criminal world due to peer pressure and their families.

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, a research report published in the Daily times states that due to unemployment among many offenders after leaving the prison

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of re-offence inclined to 60%. A long term solution to

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predicament is the government should launch a publicity campaign in the media and in schools to educate people to consider them like the way were before committing the crime. Those who have completed their detention time and became a good member of

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, people should accept them and give them all the rights to live in

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. An awareness campaign could shed some light on

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difficult situation and allow people to be more open and honest about it.

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, a similar initiative in Japan resulted in a 40% decrease in crime and

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of re

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. In conclusion, the

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of committing a

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crime by the delinquents is a major issue that results in people living with great fear;

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, it can be addressed through educating people to give them a

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

295 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

availability heuristic
media coverage
misinformation
urbanization
community cohesion
justice system
economic inequality
community policing
media literacy
surveillance
swift justice
social cohesion
neighborhood watch
deterrent

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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In some places old age is valued, while in other culture youth is considered more importance. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying medicines and treatments by themselves instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Attending a live performance (for example, a play, a concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?