In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

Dear sir or madam, I am writing
this
letter as I saw your brochure yesterday for a one-week walking tour in the mountains near the Himalayan range in Shimla. Well, the tour details suggest that it will be very adventurous and experience worth journey. My name is Adam and I am 23 years old. Currently, I am on my winter break from college and would like to complete things from my bucket list. And
this
tour is something
that is
a part of my list. So, I am excited to be a part of
this
group and would like to request detailed information about the dates and prices of
this
excursion. Before that, I want to let you know that I
also
have some health issues. I have difficulty in breathing at height and I do catch cold easily at cold places.Despite these issues, I still want to be a part of
this
journey and before that I will
also
take my doctor's advice and let you know about his suggestion. I hope that you will reply me as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Adam
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
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