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Although some people say it takes away some of our freedom, smoking should be banned in all public places. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many people
smoke
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 and it is their
freedom
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.
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, where to
smoke
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 is debatable. I strongly believe that all smokers should stay away from public places.
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, there is one clear, an important reason to prohibit smoking in all public places-for the sake of public
health
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.
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 is because passive smoking can be very harmful to people around the
smoker
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. Cigarette contains toxic chemicals
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 as nicotine and tar, and all these detrimental substances can be inhaled through passive smoking.
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 means smoking in public places can threaten others'
health
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.
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, public places like parks, bus stops, and cinemas attract all kinds of people, including those who are particularly weak and vulnerable
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 as babies, young children, pregnant women, and the elderly. These innocent people's
health
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 can be at risk when a
smoker
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 lights a cigarette recklessly. The
smoker
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 may have 'chosen' to
smoke
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 out of
freedom
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, but others around him suffer the consequences against their will.
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, places where people are allowed to
smoke
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 should be restricted.
On the other hand
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, some people argue that constraining smoking in public areas takes away smokers'
freedom
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. They claim that anyone is entitled to have
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freedom
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the freedom
 to do whatever they want.
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,
this
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 is a selfish thought since not only does smoking affect the
smoker
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 alone, but
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 it worsens many others'
health
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. The concept of
freedom
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 is lost when it harms other people and interferes with others'
freedom
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. It only seems logical to say that a
smoker
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 should take a step back in respect to many other people who are often unwillingly exposed to cigarette
smoke
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. In conclusion, smoking in all public places should be strictly banned for the purpose of public
health
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. When an individual gives up
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 habit for the benefits of the public, our society will be a better place.
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