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Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can be only tackled by individuals

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Present environmental controversies are faced with the difficult situations on a global scale. They should be controlled by the government, while others insist that these cases can only be taken care of by individuals. I partially agree with the statement, but in my perspective, some issues
can not
can not
cannot
 deal individually without the help of the government.
to
Suggestion
To
 begin with, there exists a range of big to small issues around our daily lives, and some people are of the opinion that the atmosphere issues can be tackled by the individuals.
Firstly
, People can contribute to reducing the emission of gas as not using a plastic bag or using public transportation
instead
 of their own vehicle. Those movements can help to reduce gradually emitting CO2, and using public transportation
also
 contributes to decreasing the level of air pollution to some extent.
Secondly
, People should encourage to plant trees that provide a tremendous advantage to the setting.
ultimately
Suggestion
Ultimately
, without trees, humankind will vanish to some extent because trees play a significant role in providing
a
Suggestion
an
 oxygen which human needs for good.
Therefore
, people should be careful to take care of environmental cases even if it was a small matter.
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