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Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Discipline is the foundation of the human race. It is often debated that who is responsible to establish regulation among children, teachers or parents.
This
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 essay will argue both pros and cons of the responsibility towards the discipline of the kids. The children
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initially sees
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initially see
are initially seen
 the world through the eyes of their parents. They spend a majority of growing years with their mothers and fathers. The pupil
imitate
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imitates
 their parents while developing skills like walking, holding toys, eating habits.
For example
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, if a parent is an early riser
then
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 he/she will
also
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 become the same eventually. The teachers are role model for the children. In the modern school, strength of the learners per classroom in 30 approximately. It is physically impossible for a facilitator to give attention to individual
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Accept space
.
 Teachers can act as a scaffolding to pupil in shaping their behaviour. As per a survey conducted by middle school, 95% of the students were regulated by following their
parents
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parents'
 footprints. The global world has forced most of the
parent
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parents
ot
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
or
to
stary
stay the same; remain in a certain state
stay
 out of home to ear the living. Due to
whichh
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
,
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
 are
foced
produced by or subjected to forcing
forced
faced
fused
 to
dependent
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depend
 up on
childcarer
a service involving care for other people's children
childcare
.
However
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, it is
duty
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the duty
a duty
 of parents to direct the child in the correct direction.
Alongwith
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Along with
 child will be able to learn
living
Suggestion
to live
 controlled life under guidance of the parents far
easiliy
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
.
Such
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 as, Elon Musk has become
successful entrepreneur
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a successful entrepreneur
 by following his mother's footsteps. In
conclcusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
, I completely disagree that it is alone teacher's duty to command kids.
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Nevertheless it
Accept comma addition
Nevertheless, it
 should be
parents responsibility
Suggestion
the parents' responsibility
parents' responsibility
parent's responsibility
 to discipline pupil.
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