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Since the beginning of the 20th century, the number of endangered species has increased significantly and we have witnessed more mass extinctions in this period than in any other period of time. State some reasons for this and provide possible solutions.

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It is often argued that wildlife parks are inhuman whilst other people disagree and think that they benefit the saving of wild animals. These parks create an artificial atmosphere for the wild animals and they lose the freedom of living in the forest.
On the other hand
, these parks help to protect the wild animal extinction,
also
 they will in doing research.
This
 essay supports the closing of these parks. Menagerie parks create an artificial atmosphere to the creature and they lose their freedom of living in the wild. They need to depend on others for food. Living in the
cages leads
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cages, leads
 to stress and many animals will end their whole life in the cages itself. There was an incident that happened recently, because of heavy rains in Chennai entire park was filled with water and many of the
species
 died because of lack of food. Many wild
species
 are no more and difficult to save from extinction. With the research and crossbreeding techniques, we can see a few
species
 now. With these measures, we can save existence for the future generation. In one of the news articles, because of the research and wildlife reserves, the current count of Indian tigers has increased to 300 in the current year which is less than 100 in the
last
 five years. In conclusion, wildlife parks need to be closed, which will help various
species
 to connect with nature and gain their freedom.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • mass extinctions
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystems
  • ecological imbalance
  • human well-being
  • illegal hunting
  • poaching
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • awareness
  • education
  • conservation
  • laws
  • regulations
  • international cooperation
  • sustainable practices
  • protected areas
  • public awareness
  • community-based conservation efforts
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