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Nowadays, many families have both parents working some working parents believe other family members like grandparents can take care of their children, while other think child care center provide the best care. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.?

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Most of the parents trust grandparents for providing good
responsibility
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however some
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however, some
 depends on child duty centre.
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 essay will enumerate my positive opinion about the
grandparents
Suggestion
grandparent
 power as compare to
responsibility
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 centre which is given below. To embark on, numerous of parents are going offices by leaving their children behind with their grandparents. As they trust that, grandparent will take
responsibility
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 for them.
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, with grandparent offsprings feel safe and secure at home.
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, grandparents teach valuable things to their grandparents. They teach the sacraments and good habits with love and authority.
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, the children grown under their grandparents are more attached to family and relatives, and in return kids are loved by every member of the family.
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, there are plenty of childcare centres who generally take
responsibility
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 of the young lives by taking the money.
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, they have their own rules and regulations through which they teach children.
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, they have specific timings under which parents have to take their children from duty centres.
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, these centres are mostly for those parents who have nuclear family and who do not have anyone for their child cares. They teach children by entertaining them and by doing a number of acts. They are advanced in using technology to build their brains. They help kids in advance and learning acts quickly. To conclude,
responsibility
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 taking is most important part of child growth and
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 can be well supported only by their grandparents.
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However both
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 are beneficial, but
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,
bothult
(sports) a division during which one team is on the offensive
bout
 to take care of all the individual children equally.
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