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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is a fact that we live in an age of modern technological advancement. Some people agree that we have too many choices in our life and some believe
otherwise
. I completely agree with the argument that there are too many options around us. In
this
 essay, I will explain my support for the former view with some examples.  
Firstly
, we have so many options in the field of media entertainment.
This
 is because of the advancement in computer science and coverage of internet services.
For instance
, there are many streaming services like Netflix, Hulu, Disney+, Etc. Alternatively, a few decades back, people must rely on the cable TV for entertainment.
As a result
, people have lots of streaming services to subscribe to and the advancement in computer science field aid that choice.  
Secondly
, Students have so many choices to choose from for their
education
.
This
 is because of the need for workers in the newly advancing fields. When the engineering
education
first
 introduced, universities were offering a few courses like civil, mechanical, electrical, etc. But nowadays you can find courses on advanced and cutting-edge technologies like microbiology, textile engineering, petrochemical engineering etc. Due to the need for more employees on these fields, the need for
education
 on them increased drastically.   To recapitulate, no one can deny that we are living in the modern era. There are advancements in all the fields around us. Quoting the fields like media, entertainment and
education
, I agree with those who believe that nowadays we have too many options to choose from.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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