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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages ti living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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At times, people have shifted their preference for accommodation from houses to the apartments.
Hence
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, apartments have become
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first choice
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the first choice
 for living by working people, whereas houses are still preferable by old people.But, every aspect has its own advantages as well as disadvantages.In my opinion, living in an apartment has major advantages than living in houses which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin
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 with advantages people can have by living in an apartment is that they feel a sense of
security
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.
For example
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, People can let their children play freely as there is always a
security
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gaurd
direct the course; determine the direction of travelling
guide
guard
 available to watch over.
Additionally
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, the
security
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 of home is
also
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 a benefit, if a family is away on a long trip.
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Moreover there
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Moreover, there
 is full possibility of developing markets and schools in the nearby area because
there
of them or themselves
their
 lives a huge number of families.
On the other hand
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, invaded privacy is the key drawback of living in an apartment.
Secondly
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, sometimes, people may
also
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 find difficult to get along with neighbours. By talking about benefits people can have by living in a house starts with privacy.
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, One can have his or her own garden, car parking, car garage etc.On the opposite side, the key drawback is the maintenance may become difficult for old people and
also
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 for people with lower income.
In addition
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, house
security
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 is
also
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 at risk if a family is away on a long journey. To sum up, by considering time and maintenance factors apartments can be the
first
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 choice for modern families.
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