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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#internet #access #information
Internet is it a great resource or a worse nightmare? Apart from a few apparent reasons it is a great tool in the modern era. In the past Information
is gathered
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was gathered
 through books or from people who have them.
Accessibilty
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Access
Accessibility
 to these resources is very little. Unless your social and economic situation is suitable to get in touch with these resources, It is not available to all. Primarily, With
invent
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the invent
 of internet everything is accessible at the place you sit, anyone from anywhere can read or share anything.
For example
 a person
a
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an
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
idea
 can share a video of how to perform yogic postures and a
peron
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Peron
person
 in
united states
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the united states
 can watch that video and imitate the same. In-addition to that communication has become very easy to perfom.
previously
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Previously
 to send a message to a friend you have to write a letter and it takes
few days
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a few days
 to reach him. Now with
this
 wonderful technology we can send and receive emails instantly.
Last
 but not the least, change in the way of work. Most of the work is performed online. Either it is building a website, teaching to a student or conference call with the president of
united states
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the united states
. You can sit in your house and complete your tasks.
On the contrary
, it has its own
set backs
an unfortunate happening that hinders or impedes; something that is thwarting or frustrating
setbacks
 when it comes to
misue
apply to a wrong thing or person; apply badly or incorrectly
misuse
mice
 of the facilities
such
 as hacking accounts, children watching adult content or playing video games.
However every thing
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However, everything
However everything
 we use in our daily life can be misused. A knife in
doctors hand
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the doctor's hand
doctor's hand
 will save a life, same knife in
hand
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the hand
hands
 of a
murderor
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murder or
 can kill a person.
Its
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It's
 not the thing we use,
its
it is
it's
 how we use it.
Inconclusion internet
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On the conclusion internet
On conclusion internet
In conclusion internet
 is offering a wide range of benefits for comfortable living. It has its own set
backs but
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backs, but
 they can be mitigated by proper security and filtering systems.
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