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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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The two charts here illustrate the purpose of the study among students of various ages (from under 26 to over 49) and the aid they received from the employers. The ratio between the support of different employers is determined using percentages. Overall, the largest ratio of student study for a career is under 26 with more than 80%. Whilst the least ratio performs that for a career is people who are over 49. The reverse totally with that for interest as it's the smallest during the period below 26 and biggest above 49.
On the other hand
, the most comfort they have from employers beneath 26. In terms of study of interest, we found that their proportion increases as the people grow older until it reaches the max value over 49. The opposite for career the minimum value older 49. The support the student gets from the employers varies and doesn't increase or decrease as they got older because the largest value under26 formerly between 26-29
then
 over 49, ending with that within 30-39.
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