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Some believe that it is beneficial to show foreign films while others feel this can have a negative impact on local culture. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, people prefer to enjoy foreign films during their leisure period. Some experts suggest that watching exotic films may be beneficial for us in numerous ways. In my opinion, foreign movies are nothing but a threat to our own
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. On the one hand, we are living in the era of globalization, science, and technology. People of one country enjoy the television programmes of another country
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and it is not a gigantic task because of broadband and WiFi.
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, quality of Hollywood, Bollywood and Asian movies are far better than that of local movies. The directors and producers use cutting-edge technology in bringing special effects in a movie.
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, I am into foreign movies so much
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and I opt for going to the cinemas with my near and dear ones every now and
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 to indulge me into Hollywood blockbusters. So, it is so normal for an individual to be a supporter of foreign movies as we consider ourselves as global citizens.
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, mass people, especially the juveniles are a little bit attracted to western
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.
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, the
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 of the developing countries is in a miserable state right now because of lack of research and passion.
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, the film industry of most of the underdeveloped territories suffers significantly from financial constraints.
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, FDC, the movie making industry of Bangladesh, a neighbouring country of India, is in a derelict state at present because of lack of financial support from the government as well as the concerned ministry. In conclusion, the authorities should adopt appropriate steps to rejuvenate the film industry and put an embargo on imported films because of its negative effects on the
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 and young generation.
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