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More and more people do online shopping. Why is this the situation? What is the effect of online shopping on shops and communities?

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Today, with the internet so readily accessible to us more and more people are turning to online shopping for all their needs. Clothes, Shoes, Electronics, Groceries and even fruits and vegetables can now be purchased via the internet.
This
 essay shall look into the reasons why people are switching to online shopping
instead
 of traditional shopping, and
also
 discuss its effects on shops and societies. There are several advantages of shopping online, because of which people are opting for
this
 method of shopping. The
first
 is the ability to shop at a time
that is
 convenient to you
,
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 not just when the shops are open. The
second
 advantages of shopping online is that goods are often cheaper as the seller does not have the costs of running a shop and having to pay wages to salespersons
,
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,
 insurance and all of the other running costs of a real world business. Online shopping can
also
 be a lot more comfortable than real world shopping, as people do not have to go out in bad weather sometimes. A huge advantages of shopping online is that people have the opportunity to compare as many products and prices as they want, without having to spend the time and money to travel between several different shops. They are
also
 able to read reviews that have been written by other people who have purchased the
item
 they are considering. They are able to find out about the
item
 from a genuine user not just the salesperson.
Finally they
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Finally, they
 are able to find and buy products all over the world not just in their local area, which makes purchasing of hard-to-find items a lot easier. There are many negative effects of the trend of online shopping
on
Suggestion
for
 people and societies. The main negative of shopping online is that people have to pay shipping costs and have to wait for the items they purchased to be shipped and delivered. Another disadvantage is that they cannot feel or see the
item
 they want to buy. Sometimes
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,
 the
item
 they get could be quite different from what they wanted. Another disadvantage of shopping online is that it is cumbersome to return faulty goods. It can literally take weeks to exchange a faulty product purchased online.
Then
,
Cyber-crime
crime committed using a computer and the internet to steal a person's identity or sell contraband or stalk victims or disrupt operations with malevolent programs
cybercrime
 is
also
 an issue. A person’s credit card number could be hacked and misused. In summary, the main reasons of shopping online are the convenience and cost savings, which are
also
 the positive effects. There are many negative effects on local shops and societies. Despite the negative
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,
 I believe that online shopping is here to stay and prosper.
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