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Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

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There can be no doubt that technology like television made people lethargic and less socialize and everyone sitting in front of it for longer hours. I agree with the notion that nowadays humans are giving less priority to social activities and more for entertainment. In the following essay, I intend to describe the reasons for
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 phenomenon.
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 with, nowadays, people are engaging more with entertainments like watching boxing and playing indoor games with gadgets which is causing health issues. What I mean by
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 is that when they watch movies continuously for three to four hours they tend to consume more snacks and unhealthy food.
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, mankind avoids gathering with their friends which will diminish their social life.
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, a recent survey which was reported that 70 percentage of people who watch television got severe health issues in
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 ten years.
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, social life is imperative to obtain the current information and expand the friend circle.
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 people can connect their friend in messages and other mode of chat apps, human bonding increases when you meet directly another person and in a group. To illustrate, it has been proven that friend's relation stronger if people socialize personally than social platforms. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, there is a plethora of benefits if people communicate in person than watching television or entertaining at home.
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