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Some people think that children should begin their education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Educating Children has been the forefront goal for most nations on earth in recent times.
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, the optimum
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 at which a child’s
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 should begin remains the subject of much debate. While some say formal teaching should commence at
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seven
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, others argue for earlier.
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 essay will look at both sides of the argument and give an opinion that waiting till
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seven
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 before starting
school
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 is the right way to go. On the one hand, the proponents of early start-off in
education
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 say that it gives room for other things later in
life
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. They say if the child starts
schooling
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school
 on
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, he will have more
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 later in
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 to devote to other things that matter more than
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.
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, they state the case of Mark Andrews, the renowned space scientist who led earth’s
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 visit to mass and celebrated as a genius. He started
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 at the
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 of four and was done with studies in no
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, so he was able to focus on space studies and exploration.
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 level of success in the scientific world that he has achieved he attributed to his quick startup in
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 during an interview he granted the British Broadcasting Station news anchor, Piers Morgan, on Tuesday, 3rd of April, 2015.
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 example, they say, shows that early
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 does give early startups to
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 and contributes to a successful career.
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, those who argue that training should wait until at least
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 years say that
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 is when the mental ability for comprehension develops in a child. To illustrate, they often mention the experiment of Sir Alfred James, the British
psychologist professor
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psychologist, professor
 in the Cambridge University who did a study looking at the development of the brain part called the limbic system in fifty children, twenty-five of whom
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were
 below
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 years and the rest were
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 years and above. The experiment showed that the limbic system, which was the brain part responsible for comprehension, was grossly underdeveloped in those
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under
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 years while it was well-developed in those
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 years and above.
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 study shows that cognitive capacity is deficient in preschool-
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 children, and their schooling should be made to wait until
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seven
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 when they will be better able to comprehend the subjects being taught. In conclusion, while there may be the benefit of
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 available for other things later in
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 for those who start
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 early, it is better to wait until
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seven
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 when the full powers of comprehension would have formed so that the child is better able to assimilate the knowledge organized learning imparts.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • social development
  • structured learning environments
  • essential skills
  • reading, writing, and arithmetic
  • social norms
  • undue stress and pressure
  • natural curiosity and creativity
  • unstructured play
  • emotional and psychological development
  • mature
  • rigors of formal education
  • natural developmental timeline
  • life skills
  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • informal learning
  • structured educational system
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