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Many species of animals have become extinct in recent times. What are the causes of this? What are some possible solutions?

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In recent years, most animal species have become increasingly threatened with
extinction
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. The main causes of
this
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 problem are overpopulation and the massive increase in
pollution
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.
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, in order to address
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 serious issue, I would recommend establishing animal sanctuaries and environmental conservation. The first cause comes from the increasing number of population all over the world. In the
last
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 two decades, the population density has increased significantly because of the availability of natural resources and development facilities.
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, these causes have led most
animals
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 to immigrate from their homes to other places that are not suitable for their nature which led to the
extinction
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 of some species.
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,
pollution
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 contributed to threats and extinct
animals
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.
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, in 2009, biologists at Oxford University warned
people
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 that there were some sea creatures threatened with
extinction
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 and died because of plastic rubbish that was thrown by
people
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 in the oceans.
Pollution
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 has caused several issues on our planet and one of them is animal
extinction
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 which
animals
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 form an essential balance in the ecosystem. To tackle
this
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 problem, the government should clearly define geographical areas for animal sanctuaries. The Areas that protect
animals
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 from hunting, and are far from
people
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 and crowded cities which helps
animals
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 to live in their habitat and reproduce peacefully and maintain them from
extinction
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.
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,
people
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 should be more concerned and aware of the consequences of
pollution
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 and one way to increase awareness among
people
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 is by the government should invest in environmental protection campaigns and conduct courses in order to teach
people
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 how to recycle their rubbish effectively.
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, high schools in Germany taught students about the effects of
pollution
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 especially on
animals
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 and how they can recycle their plastic waste and replace it with eco-friendly products. Today, they have the lowest
pollution
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 rates in the world. In conclusion, recently some animal species have been threatened with
extinction
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 because of overpopulation and
pollution
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 problems.
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, it can be addressed by establishing animal protection organizations and spreading awareness among
people
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 about the consequences of
pollution
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 on our ecosystem.

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