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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

#people #job #satisfaction #security
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There are many people believe that
job
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satisfaction
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 is more important than a steady
job
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.
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, there are many other people objecting
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 statement.
This
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 essay will discuss both opinions; yet, I hold a belief that
job
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satisfaction
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 is so necessary. On the one hand,
job
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satisfaction
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 brings benefits for people.
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,
job
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satisfaction
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 promotes people have a better
life
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. If people have
job
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satisfaction
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, they will make everything better. Working with passions will help people work hard; thence, effective work will
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 expand.
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, according to BBC news, 50000 workers are satisfied with their
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 will make them create good products.
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,
job
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satisfaction
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 helps workers earn more money to have a good
life
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.
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, according to a research of
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 University, if people make lots of money, the quality of
life
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 will be expanded. People have money to buy good products, pay for good services, travel around the world whenever and wherever they want;
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, they will have a great
life
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. From my perspective, I believe that the
job
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satisfaction
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 is an important key in a career.
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, many people think an unchangeable
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 is more important than
job
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satisfaction
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. The stable
job
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 will ensure their
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life quality
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life, quality
 has no chance. People will not face many difficulties, if they have a stable
job
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.
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, when people have a permanent
job
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, they do not have many problems.
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, a permanent
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 will make
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 so boring. The unchangeable
job
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 makes workers not attempt to
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work
;
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, it is easy to be pleased with their
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. In conclusion, there are convincing argument both for and against
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satisfaction
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 or the stable
job
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; yet, I think that
job
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satisfaction
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 is a necessary aspect of
life
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.
Submitted by Samiksha Singh on

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