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A university plans to develop a new reseatch center in your country . Some people want a center for business research .Other people want a center for research in agriculture .Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country ? Use specific reasons in your recommendation

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In my
country
, Egypt, I think that the question about establishing a new
research
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 in
business
 or in agriculture is a controversial one.
First
 of all, because I think that both these centres must work together and cooperate.
For example
, a
business
research
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 can collect
information
 about what kind of cereal people prefer more and how much of it they consume every year.
Then
this
information
 can be used by an agricultural
research
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
, which in its turn will provide the company engaged in farming with essential
information
Second
 of all, it is rather difficult to decide which
research
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 will bind more benefits to my
country
. From the one side,
business
Suggestion
the business research centreprobe Center
business research centreprobe Center
research
 centreprobe
center
 can make very interesting and essential
research
 for the economy of the
country
.It can gather
information
 about small
business
 in the
country
, about consumer's preferences and what can be done to decrease the state debt. When I was in my
third
 year in the university, we (me and my classmates) make
research
 regarding how many people use urban transportation every day and how much they spend on it monthly.It was really an amazing experience.We calculated numbers, learnt how to make conclusions and suggestions.From the other side, an agricultural
research
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 can be very helpful in studying the conditions.Under which the harvest of wheat or potato can be better or the quality of vegetables can be improved.The increased harvest of wheat will bring more money to the companies engaged in farming. With regard to mention above, I think that if I would have to choose what probe
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
 will be more useful for my
country
 it would be an agricultural
research
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
.Because, nowadays I tend to think that a good harvest is more important for people of my
country
 that knowing how advertising influence the people's behaviour
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