Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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It is considered by most of the people that having fixed
annuity
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age
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for all employees, irrespective of
occupation
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, is not
justifed
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justified
. In my opinion, I agree that the
annuity
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age
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should be fixed as per the
occupation
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of the people and
also
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some of the workers should be given an opportunity to retire early owing to their
health
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conditions.
First
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of all, most of the people who are in their early 60's start facing
health
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issues which makes it difficult for them to focus on their jobs.Particularly, where frequent travelling, field visits and physical
work
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is the utmost
job
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requirement. These types of
job
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will
detoriate
become worse or disintegrate
deteriorate
health
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conditions of the employees.
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,
this
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will
also
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led
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lead
to low productivity and
demotivation
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in the organization.
Secondly
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, there are various types of
job
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categories some
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categories, some
require more physical
work
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while
other
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others
require less.To give a clear example, IT
jobs mostly
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jobs, mostly
include office
work
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with
minimilistic
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physical
work
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and employees
work
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either on laptops or on computers.
In contrast
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to
this
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, a regular factory worker does most of the physical
work
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and, people near and above 60 years will find it difficult to put physical effort.To illustrate
this
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, In mining industry where people have to
work
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in harsh conditions and lift up heavy items will find it difficult as they grow older.
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,
annuity
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age
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should be decided as per the
occupation
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otherwise
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it may have
sever
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severed
impact on
health
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conditions of people.
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, In my view, people who
are engage
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are engaged
are engaging
have engaged
in blue collar jobs
such
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as in mining industries, textiles, steels and factories should be given an
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
of early
retirement
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.
In addition
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to
this
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, white collar jobs people can
also
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avail the early
annuity
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owing to their
health
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conditions. To overcome
this
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issue, there should be some relaxation given to the employees to choose
thier
of them or themselves
their
retirement
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age
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as per their feasibility. Take
for example
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, the Public Sector companies in India have set a
voluntarily
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voluntary
retirement
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age
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at 55 years for all the employees and factory workers.
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, the government should encourage industries to
fixed
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fix
the
annuity
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age
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as per their
job
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categories. To conclude, In my view, industries should set the
retirement
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age
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as per the
occupation
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and in case of any severe problem, people should be allowed to avail
voluntarily
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voluntary
retirement
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and pension benefits at an early
age
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.
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