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You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: explain why you took the job describe the problems that you experienced suggest what could be done about them

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Dear
Mr.
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 Mehta, I am writing a letter to draw your attention to a situation concerning my
part time
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job
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. I started my
job
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 as an Account
since
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last
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 month. I joined the
job
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 to support my expenses towards
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education.
However
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, after working
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weeks, I have been feeling that my decision was not appropriate due to
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 issues.
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, my
job
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 profile is not clear. I have been given any activities which are not related to my domain. Some of the tasks are even related to
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housekeeping
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house keeping
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.
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, my duty
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 defined
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hours in the evening.
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, I have to work daily 6 hours without
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over time
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. Unfortunately, these problems have made me extremely nervous and I am planning to resign
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job
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, I would recommend
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 the company policy and start paying overtime for
part time
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part-time
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employee
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employees
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.
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,
employee's
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 roles , responsibilities and
job
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description
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 to be defined very well and
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 he should be given
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assignment
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, you are kindly requested to take necessary action on it. I look
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forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Anand
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