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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

With the advancement of new technology, people are demanding a more comfortable life, due to which they prefer to
use more
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use, more
 personal vehicles
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 as cars, rather than using public transport. The benefits of
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 trend cannot neglect the adverse impact of chlorofluorocarbon gases emitted by these vehicles affecting the
environment
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.
This
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 trend has given birth to many environmental issues and those cannot be ignored at any cost. The air
pollution
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 is the major issue caused by vehicles. Nowadays, people are using their own cars to commute from one place to another.
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, air
pollution
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 is increasing
day
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day which
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day, which
as a result
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, causes many respiratory diseases among
people
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the people
.
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, people who are suffering from asthmatic allergies, cannot breathe in
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 polluted
environment
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.
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, more vehicles bring more problems.
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, the other major issue about the
environment
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 is the depletion of the ozone
layer
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.
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 is
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 happening just because of
pollution
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 in the
environment
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. More and more vehicles are launched by the companies, and these vehicles are attracting youth towards them, due to which youngsters are more interested in buying their personal cars.
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, Air
pollution
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 is increasing and the ozone
layer
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 is depleting and many UVA AND UVB harmful rays are entering into the earth
layer
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 and causing skin cancers.
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, due to the depletion of the ozone
layer
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, the glaciers are
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 melting, due to which, sea level is increasing
day
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 by
day
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 and causing floods in many areas.
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,
noise
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pollution
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 is
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 increasing with an increase in vehicles in society. People are blowing horns on each other and creating
noise
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pollution
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. Some youngsters
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 made car races due to which the natural
environment
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 gets disturbed. Some racing car engines make lots of
noise
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, which is
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 the cause of
noise
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pollution
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. In conclusion, I would say that using personal vehicles are causing lots of environmental issues and these problems cannot be ignored in comparison to the benefits of using personal cars.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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