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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railwaw lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some countries believe that building railways are really important for
transportation
 because they think that it is one of the most used
transportation
 ways. A part of their community support the idea that new railways between the cities is necessary, while others think that allocated
money
 should be used for more useful innovations to their not new
transportation
 ways.
This
 essay believes that it is necessary to have them. Nowadays, fast
train
transportation
 has become really popular because they have got faster. People want to arrive where they want quickly because they do not have so much time anymore to drive or use a bus and they prefer using fast trains because it is faster, cheaper, more comfortable than any other
transportation
 ways. The countries, which have
train
Suggestion
trained
transportation
 everywhere have more income than other countries.
For instance
, Japan. In the beginning of constructing new railways, they had to allocate a big amount of
money
 because there were two different spending (trains and railways). After one year, the income from
train
transportation
 increased 40 percent. So, it is noticeable that government and people were satisfied.
On the other hand
,
this
 is a risky spending for the governments because railways have to be
maintenanced
activity involved in maintaining something in good working order
maintenance
 all the time and it must not be missed.
Otherwise
, it can cause lots of damage. The biggest reason is it costs too much
money
. So, they try to improve the transportations
,
Accept space
,
which they already have so far. The missing point is they already have been improved enough and there is not much left to improve.
Also
,
train
transportation
 is not improved enough. So states have to catch up
this
 situation. The government of Spain had spent too much
money
 on bus
transportation
 and they have buses to everywhere but they did not listen to the majority of their people. People wanted faster trains and railways to everywhere because the busses were not enough. So, it was an unnecessarily spent and both sides did not get what they wanted. To sum up, it is clear to see that people are more satisfied with
train
transportation
 because it is better compared with the other ways. In my own opinion, if governments can handle that. They should spend their
money
 to build more railways for newer fast trains.
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