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Some people believe that the best way to spend a holiday in a foreign country is to go out to meet people, instead of staying in the hotel most of the time. What is your opinion? Give reasons & include relevant examples from your own experience.

People go on vacations in foreign countries to know more about the nation. Every person has their own way of exploring a place and celebrating their holiday. A few people spend a lot of
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 in hotel, while some meet other people to grab knowledge and make best use of their
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. When on a vacation, a lobby group spends most of their
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 relaxing in the hotels. Getting a break from the hectic routine and spending their day in hotel makes them feel more at peace. Apart from
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, utilizing all the five star services on just a simple phone call, and resting in the comfort zone without stressing about the daily routine makes it one of their best holidays. But, in my opinion, it is a total waste of
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 and money.
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 facilities are easily available at our homes, and spending huge money for all
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 luxurious expenses can seem to be a little impractical. At the
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 of visiting foreign places, people should try to know more about their culture, tradition and try different cuisines. They should not only visit famous tourist spots, but
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 meet new people who can help them explore more about the history of the city in depth.
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 of wasting that
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 and resting in fancy hotels, they should avail that opportunity and utilize that period in knowing more about their lives. To conclude, people on holidays should enjoy their
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 by relaxing, but they should
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 spend most of their
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 by exploring that place by interacting with new people who can help them come close to that place and learn more about that country.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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