Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private-health care outweigh the advantages?

The United States, while being portrayed as the greatest country on earth, faces
one
constant criticism, and
that is
their
healthcare
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health care
system
. In most developed nations, where the accepted view is that medical
care
should be accessible
for
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to
all citizens, it is unthinkable that anyone should have to pay for non-elective medical services. While some in the USA claim there are benefits to privatised
healthcare
, I believe that they are far outweighed by the associated disadvantages. While I do not support the notion of privatised
healthcare
, there is
one
benefit which I have noticed. It seems far easier to
access
non-essential medical services in the United States than it is Canada, which has a public
healthcare
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health care
system
.
For example
, when
one
of my Canadian friends injured their knee and required minor surgery, he was put on a six month waiting list.
However
, he was able to have that same procedure scheduled and delivered within a week in a Chicago clinic. He did,
however
, have to pay several thousand dollars for the procedure, but it allowed him to return to the football field much faster. There are many other supposed benefits,
such
as attracting the world's best doctors, and spurring medical innovation.
However
, I do not necessarily know if
that is
true, as I have seen little evidence to support those claims. It would seem to me that all the private health
system
can only offer is speed and
access
, if you have the money to pay for it. Aside from
one
benefit, In my view, it has many issues. The main issue with private
healthcare
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health care
is how it limits
access
to medical
care
, which is extremely problematic if
one
considers it a basic human right. A private
system
creates price barriers which limit
access
to medical services for those who may need it most,
such
as elderly people on a fixed income. People should not have to take on extreme levels of debt to finance life-saving medical procedures.
However
, when desperate, people will pay anything to return to health, and the cost of a life saving procedure may end up ultimately ruining a person's life. I do not think anyone would want to live in a society where medical
care
is reserved for the most affluent.
Additionally
, I believe that private
healthcare
can decrease the health and productivity of a society. In a privatised
system
, people rarely visit
healthcare
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health care
professionals for scheduled services,
instead
they only seek
care
when emergencies arise.
Although
a crude comparison, I think the human body is similar to an automobile. If regularly serviced and maintained, the car should work efficiently and unexpected breakdowns are unlikely.
However
, if I were to disregard the maintenance schedule, a serious, and costly,
breakdown
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the breakdown
a breakdown
would eventually occur. A private
healthcare
system
disincentivises
a negative motivational influence
disincentives
regular medical interventions, due to the high cost of doing so, and contributes to a less healthy and by extension less productive populace. While the debate on whether to privatise medical
care
in Australia comes up frequently, I think that the urge to do so must be resisted. In my opinion, the scant benefits private
healthcare
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health care
may bring about, mainly
speed
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the speed
of
access
for non-essential services, are far outweighed by the harm these
sytems
instrumentality that combines interrelated interacting artifacts designed to work as a coherent entity
systems
inflict on society, by reserving medical well being for those who can afford it, as evidenced by the American experience.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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