Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private-health care outweigh the advantages?

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The United States, while being portrayed as the greatest country on earth, faces
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constant criticism, and
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health care
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. In most developed nations, where the accepted view is that medical
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should be accessible
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all citizens, it is unthinkable that anyone should have to pay for non-elective medical services. While some in the USA claim there are benefits to privatised
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, I believe that they are far outweighed by the associated disadvantages. While I do not support the notion of privatised
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, there is
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benefit which I have noticed. It seems far easier to
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non-essential medical services in the United States than it is Canada, which has a public
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health care
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.
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, when
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of my Canadian friends injured their knee and required minor surgery, he was put on a six month waiting list.
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, he was able to have that same procedure scheduled and delivered within a week in a Chicago clinic. He did,
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, have to pay several thousand dollars for the procedure, but it allowed him to return to the football field much faster. There are many other supposed benefits,
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as attracting the world's best doctors, and spurring medical innovation.
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, I do not necessarily know if
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true, as I have seen little evidence to support those claims. It would seem to me that all the private health
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can only offer is speed and
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, if you have the money to pay for it. Aside from
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benefit, In my view, it has many issues. The main issue with private
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health care
is how it limits
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to medical
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, which is extremely problematic if
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considers it a basic human right. A private
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creates price barriers which limit
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to medical services for those who may need it most,
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as elderly people on a fixed income. People should not have to take on extreme levels of debt to finance life-saving medical procedures.
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, when desperate, people will pay anything to return to health, and the cost of a life saving procedure may end up ultimately ruining a person's life. I do not think anyone would want to live in a society where medical
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is reserved for the most affluent.
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, I believe that private
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can decrease the health and productivity of a society. In a privatised
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, people rarely visit
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professionals for scheduled services,
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they only seek
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when emergencies arise.
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a crude comparison, I think the human body is similar to an automobile. If regularly serviced and maintained, the car should work efficiently and unexpected breakdowns are unlikely.
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, if I were to disregard the maintenance schedule, a serious, and costly,
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the breakdown
a breakdown
would eventually occur. A private
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system
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disincentivises
a negative motivational influence
disincentives
regular medical interventions, due to the high cost of doing so, and contributes to a less healthy and by extension less productive populace. While the debate on whether to privatise medical
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in Australia comes up frequently, I think that the urge to do so must be resisted. In my opinion, the scant benefits private
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health care
may bring about, mainly
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the speed
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for non-essential services, are far outweighed by the harm these
sytems
instrumentality that combines interrelated interacting artifacts designed to work as a coherent entity
systems
inflict on society, by reserving medical well being for those who can afford it, as evidenced by the American experience.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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