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Nowadays more and more people want to get things done instantly (services, information, tasks). Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In
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 modern era, the internet is accessible in every part of the country, which offered the privilege of access to the various kinds of services at the fingertip. Certainly, I believe
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 is a positive development in technology. In
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 essay, positive impacts of instant services will be discussed
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, followed by negative impacts.
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, with the introduction of smartphones, people have access to e-commerce, services application like
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, online banking, etc. With a few button clicks.
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. Gone are the days when we had to stand in a long queue and wait for hours to get the billing done in shopping centre or to pay the utility bills. Currently, all these can be done in few seconds. One of the most advantageous things is we can do
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 anywhere, because it works in mobiles, laptop, tablets etc.
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, instant services
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 have fewer negative impacts on average earning people.
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, in order to avail the instant services, user needs to pay extra money, and
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 facility is only available in some of the major cities of the country,
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 everything is dependent on the connection speed of the internet, if the connection is poor, people tend to lose patience and get annoyed. To conclude, if the present generation wants to get everything done instantly,
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 because they grew up using the internet technology. While
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 trend is largely positive, in my opinion, too much of anything is good for nothing,
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, I feel over dependence on anything is bad.
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