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Some parents believe that watching TV and playing computer games should be limited and substituted by reading books. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Over the past couple of decades, there has been an upward trend in the
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 children spend in front of TV and playing games on a
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. A portion of parents is of the opinion that
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 should be limited,
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 are of a belief that
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 should be spent reading books. I am in complete agreement with said recommendation. In recent times, there is a plethora of
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 games and television shows that are available to children,
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 advances in technologies have made it possible for children to play games online as well. These are addictive and children tend to spend a significant amount of times using these media while ignoring everything else. Not only is
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 a behaviour unhealthy, but it
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 limits the social development of children.
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, a study in the UK has shown an increase in anti-social tendencies in
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 children.
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, many television shows and
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 games can affect the outlook of children because they have a higher content of violence and abusive language
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, parents must limit the kids’ screen
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. Limiting the
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 a child is allowed to play
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 games and have them spend it on other modes of entertainment,
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 as reading, is an excellent suggestion. There are several types of books that are available for children to read,
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 can help children in many ways.
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, reading a classic can help not only with the vocabulary, but
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 it can help in the classroom.
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, reading books of different genres helps in exposing a child to newer interests that they might like to pursue later in life. In conclusion, Limiting television and
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 games and encouraging children to read, will help in increasing children's knowledge and help them develop into a more balanced person.
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