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Nowadays more and more people have access to the Internet. But constant availability of any information worsens people's memory and critical thinking skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era,
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 plays a significant role in people's growth. In today's time, Everyone has the opportunity to use
internet
Suggestion
the internet
, but some people assert that it has some bad impact on human lives in regards of some serious issues. I disagree with
this
 view because
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 has the ability to change in someone's life. In the upcoming paragraphs I will try to prove my point of view.
First
 and foremost, Technology has a huge impact on individuals daily task. As the viewpoint of students, It helps in many great ways because teenagers using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 more than another for their daily tasks. To cite an example, A university of Toronto did a great research and found that 80% of schools and college students help their self with the use of
internet website
Suggestion
internet websites
an internet website
.
In addition
 to
this
, it
also
 has may good results to increase the general knowledge among the young generation on current affairs of the word.
Furthermore
, As the side of working people,
Internet
 totally changes the working style of many people because knows citizens prefer to do a job from home.
For example
, We can see that in our daily routine, Due to Covid-19 most of the office work done from home with the access of
internet
.
Thus
, Which introduce the new method of job and it's very beneficial to save the time and money.
Moreover
,
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
also
 has a big hand in the success of the online shopping and others online business like Uber, Skip and amazon etc.
On the other hand
, We cannot deny that it
also
 have so drawbacks. Many sites uploading invalid or unnecessary information for their own profit. Which can cause of many national and international wars. To summarize, I pen down and say that each coin has two sides, it depends on people how they can use it for their benefit, But
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 has the demand of current time. It has the power to change people's life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diminishes
  • shallow processing
  • critical evaluation
  • misinformation
  • unprecedented
  • discerningly
  • intellectual laziness
  • interactive content
  • problem-solving
  • actively engaged
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