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More and more fathers are taking a break from their careers so that they can stay home and take care if their children while their wives work.This is better for the family than having both parents work full time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Nowadays, in term of family and children more and more
father
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 giving their jobs more and more,
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 I do not agree with
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 idea. A wife cannot be earn same as husband,
father
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 may be exhausted while staying home and family can spend
time
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 together without anyone quitting job. A dad may end up feeling so unhappy
sstaying
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is staying
s staying
 at home.
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, he might miss being interested and challenged by job.
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in
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In
 addition
,
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he gave up the opportunity to be with his colleagues who shared his professional interests.In exchange for these things, he spends his
time
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 doing house chores
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 as mopping the floor
,
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cooking, feeding and dressing the children. When a
father
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 gives up his
career he
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career, he
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 gives up his salary.The
wifes
a married woman; a man's partner in marriage
wife
 keeps working
,
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,
but the salary
wont
will not
won't
 be as much as when the is working.
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,
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,
only one person earns salary and when
they
of them or themselves
their
 family goes from two
salarries
something that remunerates
salaries
 to one
,
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they have to make changes in their lifestyle that are not
convienient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
. Children can benefit of
time
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 with their parents even when both parents work.In the
first
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 place
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children spend most of the day in school, unless they are young.
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,
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parents can spend quality
time
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 with their children in the evenings and on weekends.They can
also
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 plan family vacations that
gives
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give
 them
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to have special experiences together. A stay at home
father
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 may seem like a good idea, but families should consider all sides of the issue, both financial and emotional, before making
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 a big change in their lifestyle.
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