Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as television, friends, and music. Others believe that the family still remains more important. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

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As our modern lives become increasingly busier and complex, we seem to have less
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to spend with family. Some among us are of the belief that
television
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, friends and music have stepped in to fill the primary
influencer
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influence
influential
influencing
role traditionally occupied by parents. Others,
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, believe that family still has the greatest impact on a
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's
development
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. While both views will be discussed below, I am of the opinion that parents, siblings and relatives still exert a greater influence on a
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's personal growth than media and friends. Some people believe the main factors influencing a
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's
development
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are
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television
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televised
, friends, and music.
This
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belief stems from correctly observing that parents have increasingly less
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to spend with their children due to work requirements. The
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which children previously would have spent with their parents and siblings is now occupied by varying forms of media and socialising with friends.
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, when I was growing up, I would have dinner with my parents and siblings nearly every evening. It would seem that nightly family dinners are much less common nowadays.
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, even when a family is together at the dinner table, it is not uncommon for some to be engaging with their digital devices, rather than with one another. Since it seems that
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with family is increasingly being substituted with other forms of socialisation and entertainment, it is understandable that some would conclude that the importance of family in a
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's
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has decreased.
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, others believe that family is still
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the strongest influence
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on
a young person's
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. In most cases, immediate family members are the people a
child
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will see most frequency, and as
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are their main source of examples on how to live life. Even if a
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's parents or siblings do not interact with them as often as in prior generations, through observing relatives' actions a
child
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develops their understanding of how to live.
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, if a
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is exposed to healthy cooking at home, they will likely understand how to select and prepare healthy meals once they leave the home. The same can be said for how a
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sees their parents manage finances, how they treat other adults, and even the language which they use. While a
child
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may try to emulate some of the people they see on
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or on social media, what they learn at home will likely be much more deeply ingrained in their minds. In summary, even though children are increasingly substituting family
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with friends and
television
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, the role of family in a
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's upbringing remains paramount. I believe that the lessons a
child
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learns from observing and interacting with their family members are far more important in shaping the adult they will eventually become.
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