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In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?

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It is true that there are people who are more diligent in their study and
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 compared with other members in society. While I acknowledge the benefits one can reap from being hardworking, I believe the drawbacks outweigh the advantages. There are certain key reasons for working and studying hard.
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, by putting strenuous effort on their
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, they are gradually getting closer to their goals.
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, a worker who
always meet
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always meets
 his deadlines would be more likely to get promoted to
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higher
 positions than the ones who do not.
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, people who persevere and strive hard for success can take pride in themselves for always trying their best and making the most out of their lives.
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, there are people who are very passionate about their
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. They are doing it simply because they enjoy the process and the interesting experiences they have while working.
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, the shortcomings of constant hard
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 are far more serious. The primary disadvantage is that it may negatively affect people’s
health
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. Working extra shifts or studying late at night, they all have
adverse impact
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an adverse impact
 on
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, not to mention the pressure that heavy workloads put on people could cause them mental issues like stress and anxiety.
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, people who are immersed in
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 all the time cannot maintain a
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-life balance. They do not have the time needed to care about their relationships and even themselves,
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, they live a lonely and tedious life. Clearly, there is no point pushing ourselves too hard if we could worsen our
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, our relationships and our lives. To sum up, working hard is advantageous as it helps us realize our dreams and
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 our desires,
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, these cannot compensate for our loss of
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, time and happiness. In my view, it is best to set boundaries on our workload and manage our tasks efficiently, so that we can maintain both productivity and well-being.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Genetic predisposition
  • Work ethic
  • Upbringing
  • Cultural values
  • Ambitions
  • Motivated
  • Fear of failure
  • Competitive nature
  • Overworking
  • Burnout
  • Stress-related health issues
  • Productivity
  • Quality of life
  • Healthy balance
  • Long-term productivity
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