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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you argree or disagree with this opinion?

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As we all know, there have been more and more tensions in the world and people have tried many ways to ease them and prompt patriotic mood among people of different nations. One of these effective ways is to host sporting events with the participation of as many countries as possible. Human’s tensions usually come from differences in politics, races, nationalities, religions and many other factors. Sports have no borders and they do not concern these disparities. When athletes compete, they try their best to achieve medals only, so do their competitors,
therefore
, they don’t care other unrelated conflicts. Understanding hardship and challenges that they have to overcome themselves to become winners, athletes find it easy to get along well with each other even their countries are at odds.
Furthermore
, the athletes, with their medals earned, will promote the spirit of their
fellowmen
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fellow men
 who will very much likely train that hard to become winners in other competitions.
As a result
, the more physically they are involved, the more tensions they will forget Sporting achievements
also
 encourage people to love their country more as their countries are good supporters for their success. By earning many international recognitions, they wish to make their countries proud and more known internationally. Even people, who do not play sports professionally, will
also
be mor
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human
e patriotic to their mother lands as their nations have more heroes and heroines in sports, to whom ordinary persons greatly admire To sum up, sports with their nature of non-violence and using human’s effort is a safe way to definitely help ease tensions and promote their love towards our countries
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