In the modern world, mobile and smartphone use has become universal in most parts of the world. Although there are clearly many advantages of this technology, there are many who believe it also brings many disadvantages. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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everyone in the world has bought or used a mobile phone. With

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technological development many people feel that there are a lot of

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advantages, but

others feel that there may be some disadvantages.Starting with the advantages, it is clear that using mobile phones makes life a lot more convenient.

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, it is possible to contact friends, colleagues and family in just a few seconds at any time of the day or from any location.

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, mobile phones can be used to access a wide variety of data applications

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as Camille and social networking sites

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as Twitter or Facebook.

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is a benefit because people are able to interact

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phones give security and peace of mind to parents who are able to contact their children easily.

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people believe that there are some clear disadvantages.

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, mobiles can make people anti-social as they spend more time looking at their phone than at each other.

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, many people can become addicted to using smartphone apps, and

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can have an effect on their mental and physical health

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affect young people whose studies or work

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there are several negatives to using mobile phones, I believe that overall there are more benefits to be had from using these devices. As long as people remember to talk to each other face-to-face and

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control their children’s access to smartphone use, I believe there is no serious problem.

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In the modern world, mobile and smartphone use has become universal in most parts of the world. Although there are clearly many advantages of this technology, there are many who believe it also brings many disadvantages. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

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A growing number of people feel that natural areas should not be exploited by people, and that they should be left as they are, while others argue that humans must use this land to satisfy their various needs, including farming and building. discuss both the views and give your opinion?