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Some people believe that it is the government’s responsibility to provide care and finance to support people after they retire. Others, however, think that individuals themselves should save money in their own when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion. > DISCUSS AND OPINION

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Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the
finance
Suggestion
financial
 issue after they retire.
However
, whether they should save money by themselves or receive assistance from the
government
 is a controversial issue.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and my view is that a financial-independent person will bring more merits. It is clear that authority plays an important role in allocating resources to improve their national security and the general welfare of its people. A disturbing fact is that there are a lot of older citizens who unable to work to earn a living out there, some of them even do not have their own children to rely on. So, the
government
 should give their top priority to assuring high-quality life for especially the elderly.
However
, a strong rising of the old-age dependency ratio year by year seems to be a great burden on the
government
 efforts of improving the quality of life. If each person can save money on their own, the
government
 could spend these expenses to solve other problems like reducing the unemployment rate or tackle environmental issues and so on.
Besides
, it is undeniable that the older generation today have rich knowledge and gain many practical experiences through their career,
hence
, they have self-awareness enough to prevent themselves from becoming a social burden as they are afraid of being an unworthy person when they get old.
Although
 each family member should take care and provide basic needs for the elder people, it would be unethical for the old to rely totally on them. So they tend to save a certain amount of money from their monthly income in their early period of a career in order to avoid dependency on others and enjoy their old age. In conclusion, despite governments should hold the duties of providing its citizens with efficient subsidies, I believe that people should prepare for their living expenses when they get older rather than expect from
government
 grants.
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