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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and will use up the world’s resources. Do you agree or disagree?

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With the unprecedented high demands for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
,
air
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travel
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 is gaining prominence throughout the world.
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 a multitude of people
subscribe
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subscribes
 to the view that the authorities should circumscribe
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by
air
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,
Accept space
,
 regarding the fact that it aggravates the problem of
pollution
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 and
resources’
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resource
 depletion. From my perspective, I concede to
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 opinion for the following reasons. To commence with, it goes with saying that
air
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travel
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 is one of the main contributions to
air
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pollution
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. When being idle or taxiing,
airplanes
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 discharge a large amount of gas which is downright detrimental to the atmosphere and expedite the process of global warming. Even worse, as a consequence of innumerable planes dispersing worldwide, the emission
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exits
have an existence, be extant
exist
exists
 in every far-flung areas, engendering large-scale climate change.
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, aside from
air
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pollution
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,
air
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travel
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also hold
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also holds
 responsibility for noise
pollution
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. People who reside in the vicinity of airports have to subject to the extreme loud noise from the engines, which exacerbates anxiety together with disgruntlement levels and deteriorates hearing ability. They either have to relocate or accustom themselves to the constant noise and risk their health.
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 but not least, it is undeniable that
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by
airplanes
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
aeroplane
 dissipate natural resources. As
airplanes
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 serve to
travel
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 long-distance routes, they entail a large amount of petrol to function well. With multifarious planes and dense schedule, the amount of resource is incalculable and the world’s resources may fail to suffice that demands. In conclusion, with the aforementioned reasons, I believe that
air
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travel
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 should be confined to mitigate the problem of solution and
resources’
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resource
 exhaustion.
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