N THE MODERN WORLD IT IS NO LONGER NECESSARY TO USE ANIMALS FOR FOOD, CLOTHING OR MEDICINE. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

Animal exploitation to meet
humans's
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humans'
needs
such
as food, clothing and medicine is unnecessary. While I agree that the killing of animals may bring some drawbacks to people
,
Accept space
,
I believe that animals play a vital role in inventing new medicine. One the one hand, I disagree with the opinion because animals
such
as white mice and rabbits may serve medical purposes.
For example
, in Russia, toxicity tests of newly - invented vaccine for the Corona virus was taken on white mice to observe the effects of
this
drug.
As a result
, the medical practitioners have managed to make a breakthrough and save nearly 20 million patients who are positive
to
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for
this
deadly disease and are on the verge of death. In
this
way, both the doctors and the patients may benefit from animals used to do the experiments.
On the other hand
, I believe that animal cruelty may bring some consequences to human-beings,
hence
, I agree with the opinion for two reasons. The
first
worth-mentioning reason is that some results of animal tests would do more harm than good to the patients. To be more specific, animals' bodies are not similar to those of
humans
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humans, thus
thus
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
side-effects which can not be found on animals' bodies may impair patients' health.
Secondly
, a plethora of illnesses
such
as obesity, cancer and heart diseases
often accompany
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often accompanies
over consumption of meat which is presumably believed to be the only ingredient containing protein. For
this
reason, the authorities have been calling people for changing their diet and cutting down on meat because there are some substitutes for meat namely tofu and mushrooms which are rich in protein. For all reasons aforementioned, it is not necessary to use animals to produce food, clothing and drugs. All existing data
provides
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provide
a concrete foundation that even though experiments with animals are beneficial for the doctors and the patients, animal exploitation
also
results in
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
adverse effects
on public health
thus
I partially agree with the opinion.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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