N THE MODERN WORLD IT IS NO LONGER NECESSARY TO USE ANIMALS FOR FOOD, CLOTHING OR MEDICINE. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

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Animal exploitation to meet

humans's

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humans'

needs

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as food, clothing and medicine is unnecessary. While I agree that the killing of animals may bring some drawbacks to people

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I believe that animals play a vital role in inventing new medicine. One the one hand, I disagree with the opinion because animals

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as white mice and rabbits may serve medical purposes.

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, in Russia, toxicity tests of newly - invented vaccine for the Corona virus was taken on white mice to observe the effects of

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drug.

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, the medical practitioners have managed to make a breakthrough and save nearly 20 million patients who are positive

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for

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deadly disease and are on the verge of death. In

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way, both the doctors and the patients may benefit from animals used to do the experiments.

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, I believe that animal cruelty may bring some consequences to human-beings,

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, I agree with the opinion for two reasons. The

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worth-mentioning reason is that some results of animal tests would do more harm than good to the patients. To be more specific, animals' bodies are not similar to those of

humans

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humans, thus

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some

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side-effects which can not be found on animals' bodies may impair patients' health.

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, a plethora of illnesses

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as obesity, cancer and heart diseases

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often accompanies

over consumption of meat which is presumably believed to be the only ingredient containing protein. For

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reason, the authorities have been calling people for changing their diet and cutting down on meat because there are some substitutes for meat namely tofu and mushrooms which are rich in protein. For all reasons aforementioned, it is not necessary to use animals to produce food, clothing and drugs. All existing data

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provide

a concrete foundation that even though experiments with animals are beneficial for the doctors and the patients, animal exploitation

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results in

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an adverse effect

adverse effects

on public health

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I partially agree with the opinion.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

327 words

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N THE MODERN WORLD IT IS NO LONGER NECESSARY TO USE ANIMALS FOR FOOD, CLOTHING OR MEDICINE. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own experience.

Include an introduction and conclusion

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of thi development?

Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter • remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was • thank them for the card and gift • explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centres and only bicycles be allowed instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?