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Tourism has caused environment problem in many parts of the world. What sort of problems has been caused and what can be done about them.?

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Nowadays, we are having so many environmental issues, which are affecting the life of everyone on the planet. One of the factors which is responsible for
this
 is
tourism
. How
tourism
 can impact our earth.? In
this
 essay we will share some of the reasons how
tourism
 is leading everyone's life in danger and how we can improve the same. All the countries support
tourism
 because it is beneficial for their respective economic growth. In order to support the
tourism
 each
country
 allow all the kinds of people in their
country
 to visit some of the very beautiful natural as well as man made things.
Although
, there are some anti-social elements in the society which
also
 visit these places and damage the nature.
Firstly
, these individuals throw litter's and make the place dirty which is not cleaned by anyone.
Secondly
, they do campfire and left the fire unattended which may lead to fire in complete forest areas.
Lastly
, they think they own
this
 place and do whatever they want and damage some of the natural made things doing things which are strictly written not to be done by the authorities.
However
, government plays an important role in managing their respective
country
 area. They can put restrictions and some strictness on the tourist.
For Example
: - Some of the countries before sending invitation to any tourist they do a proper interview of the individuals who are visiting their
country
, so that if they suspect something they can deny their visa.
In addition
, they need to add some limit on the number of people to whom they can control with proper surveillance so that they should think before doing anything wrong in the environment.
Furthermore
, people should be fined with huge amount so that they should be afraid of doing anything wrong. To conclude, earth has provided us nature and life, because of
this
 we are living.
This
 is our responsibility to take care of
this
. Government should support
tourism but
Accept comma addition
tourism, but
also
 put some limits and restrictions on people so that they can be monitored properly.
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