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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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It is true that people tend to delay pregnancy these days. While there are various reasons for
this
, I believe that overall the drawback
are
Suggestion
is
 more significant than the benefits. Admittedly, there are several reasons why people decide to postpone becoming parents. The one of
reasons
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the reasons
 is the cost of bringing up a child is exorbitant
nowdays
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
. When people are young, they have just embarked on their careers. They are paid
meager
deficient in amount or quality or extent
meagre
 incomes, and they find it would be hard to send their children to a good school if they have babies.
Therefore
, young people want to amass well to become financially stable before conceiving a baby. Apart from that, child-rearing is an onerous responsibility. Parents not only keep their children well
feed
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fed
 and clothed but
also
 educate them about
life
 skills, moral standards.
As a result
, the parents have to spend an amount of time on taking care of their children. It makes young people feel that parent obligations would tie them down. Despite the benefits mentioned above, I believe that having children late has more problems than benefits. There are numerous health risks associated with late pregnancy.
Firstly
, old mothers
run
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runs
 the risk of miscarriage. If they unfortunately be miscarried, it will have negative effects on their health.
Therefore
, the mothers are hard to be pregnant again. It
also
 takes longer for mothers to recuperate after the labour pains.
In addition
, the babies of
aged
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age
aging
 mother could be vulnerable because of the Down’s syndrome which can retard children’s growth. These babies can not do everything by themselves like other children. They must require other people in their whole
life
. In conclusion, I believe that having children later in
people
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person's
life
 has more disadvantages than benefits. It is
therefore
 important that people should be pregnant early in their
life
.
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