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In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?

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Nowadays, in many country children have to go to
school
 in four years old while in another they can start
school
 after seven or even eight. From my point of view, it is possible to start
study
Suggestion
studying
 so early, but it should be really easy an fun for children. As we can see in a lot of country around the World, the
school
 schooling starts from seven years old, it is true for a country
such
 as Russia, Hungary and Lithuania. I thing
this
 idea has some advantages.
Firstly
, children can have a really long and interesting childhood without any boring schooling.
Secondly
, they might concentrate on exploring the World around, and
finally
, they have a really great possibility to spend childhood with parents, not with the teachers. On another
heand
Suggestion
he and
 we can see that study is not always boring, it might be an adventure even for a really small babe. As we can see in Holland, children start education when they are about four years old, they start from games and basic, and
then
, step by step it is getting more and more interesting and hard. I think there are a lot of good points in
this
 system.
First
 of all, children will realise that, there are
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 children as well and they are not the centre of the World.
Secondly
, children can be really prepared for real
school
 and the can have a better result in some subjects.
Finally
, the parents can have the possibility to work and I think it might be really important nowadays. I strongly believe that the idea to start
school
 education at the age of four is a really useful and good thing. From my point of view when children start from games and basic subjects they can reach much bigger results
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 others and of course they will have fun during the education process, what is
also
 important.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal education
  • advisable
  • structured learning
  • academic skills
  • socialization
  • competitive edge
  • cognitive development
  • language acquisition
  • play-based learning
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • cognitive abilities
  • reduce stress
  • childhood
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