In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their life time. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

The way people
live
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lived
in the past and now is greatly different. In the past, people spent their whole
life staying
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life, staying
permanently in
one
place whereas
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place, whereas
they tend to be frequently on the move and change their
accomodations
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodations
accommodation
nowadays.
However
, each living
ways
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way
has its pros and cons.
This
essay will discuss about the benefits of each ways and what drawbacks people had and have. In the past, people were likely to live stably in
one
place
due to the underprivileged condition and the limitation in
family budget
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the family budget
a family budget
family budgets
. I believe that living in
one
place
had its advantages. Compensating for being unable to move around was that people were always close to and in touch with their families and friends.
Furthermore
, people knew everyone very well and helped each other so they always united and had strong relationships.
However
, there were disadvantages as well. Staying in
one
place
meant they lost their
chances
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chance
to experience new things and enrich their knowledge, which led to their poor and outdated perspectives about the world, and get better jobs. How about now? People have flexibly moved from
place
to
place
currently. Those people stand a good chance to acquire more experiences as well as have more job opportunities and they
also
can widen their relationships between people and people.
On the other hand
, they have to cope up with many challenges. The
first
one
is finance, when moving to another
place
, they have to consider carefully if they’re well off enough to afford for the transportation and
accomodation
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
accommodation
accommodations
. The
second
problem is moving around means they’re usually far away and they may lose touch with their families. The greatest obstacle is the culture shock, it’s really hard for them to get over it and catch up with the others
.
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.
Additionally
, it may take them a long time to settle down and get accustomed to everything. In conclusion, from those advantages and disadvantages mentioned above, I would prefer to live in different places rather than stay in
one
place
because I like
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
and I can learn more things about culture, cuisine, custom...
to
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To
broaden my understanding.
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