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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Addressing the constantly changing weather issue has long been a challenging task for many scientists.
However
, there are some who think that people should make adaptation to
climate
change
 in lieu of developing an approach to stopping the effects of it. In my opinion, I do not completely agree with
this
 viewpoint because I believe it is not too late for us to deal with
this
 problem. To commence with, several measures could be taken by both Government and individuals to hinder
climate
change
.
Firstly
,
Government
Suggestion
the Government
 should incentivize people to use public transportations
instead
 of private vehicles.
This
 would decrease in the
amount
 of vehicle exhaust which comprises a tremendous
carbon
 footprint. As a consequence, the
amount
 of
carbon
 emissions would be reduced, contributing less to global warming which is a part of
climate
change
.
Secondly
, people, as individuals, could utilize products made from non-plastic to reduce the
amount
 of plastics. Plastics cannot be completely destroyed, it could remain beneath the earth and pollute the soil.
Furthermore
, when burning plastic-based products, a large
carbon
 footprint would be dumped into the air.
Therefore
, by using non-plastic products
such
 as paper bags or paper straws, we could limit the
amount
 of
carbon
 dioxide which leads to global warming.
Additionally
, trying to live with
climate
change
 might lead to several disastrous repercussions. Take Australia as an example, there were forest fires which destroy a large area of Australia land and kill thousands of animals.
This
 disaster is due to the considerable increase in the
temperature which
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temperature, which
 is unprecedented in the past. Another serious disaster is the high rainfall patterns in China, making Government release tons of water in hydroelectric dams.
As a result
, many houses and villages were destroyed, and thousands of people did not have the accommodations. Those disasters are due to the
climate
change
.
Therefore
, accepting and living with it is not a good idea. In conclusion,
although
 some may have opinions that people should try to adapt to
climate
change
, I believe we should stop it.
Submitted by Andy on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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