The charts below show information about the number of fish caught and the number of fishing boats used in Westhaven. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The first chart shows information about how many
tunas
and swordfishes
were caught near Westhaven from 2008 to 2011. The second
chart gives figures about the number
of fishing boats
in Westhaven during the same period.
In 2008, the number
of swordfishes
caught was just 73 Fix the agreement mistake
swordfish
thousand
, while
the figure for tuna was higher, staying at 82 thousand
. From 2008 to 2009, both the figures for these two kinds of fish increased, however
, the speed of growth was diffirent
. Correct your spelling
different
While
the number
of tunas
caught rose by 19 thousand
, peple
caught more Correct your spelling
people
swordfishes
with the
increase Correct article usage
an
by
40 Change preposition
of
thousand
. Between 2009 and 2011, there was an upward trend in the number
of tunas
which were caught, it peaked at 109 thousand
in 2011. Meanwhile, the number
of swordfishes
witnessed a fluctuation, it fell to 73 Fix the agreement mistake
swordfish
thousand
in 2010, before rising again to 105 thousand
in the following year.
During the same time, the number
of boats
which were used for fishing stood at 60. This
number
increased slightly to 65 in 2009 before declining to just 55 in 2010. There was a sharp growth in the number
of fishing boats
to 80 boats
in 2011, making it the highest point in the second
chart.
Overall
, there was an upward trend in both the number
of fish caught and fishing boats
generally. While
,
the Remove the comma
apply
number
of tunas
caught gradually rose over the years, the figure for swordfishes
and the Fix the agreement mistake
swordfish
quantity
of Change the quantifier
number
boats
used in fishing
industry have Add an article
the fishing
the
similar tendency.Correct article usage
a
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