The charts below show information about the number of fish caught and the number of fishing boats used in Westhaven. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show information about the number of fish caught and the number of fishing boats used in Westhaven. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The first chart shows information about how many
tunas
and
swordfishes
were caught near Westhaven from 2008 to 2011. The
second
chart gives figures about the
number
of fishing
boats
in Westhaven during the same period. In 2008, the
number
of
swordfishes
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caught was just 73
thousand
,
while
the figure for tuna was higher, staying at 82
thousand
. From 2008 to 2009, both the figures for these two kinds of fish increased,
however
, the speed of growth was
diffirent
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different
.
While
the
number
of
tunas
caught rose by 19
thousand
,
peple
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people
caught more
swordfishes
with
the
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increase
by
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40
thousand
. Between 2009 and 2011, there was an upward trend in the
number
of
tunas
which were caught, it peaked at 109
thousand
in 2011. Meanwhile, the
number
of
swordfishes
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swordfish
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witnessed a fluctuation, it fell to 73
thousand
in 2010, before rising again to 105
thousand
in the following year. During the same time, the
number
of
boats
which were used for fishing stood at 60.
This
number
increased slightly to 65 in 2009 before declining to just 55 in 2010. There was a sharp growth in the
number
of fishing
boats
to 80
boats
in 2011, making it the highest point in the
second
chart.
Overall
, there was an upward trend in both the
number
of fish caught and fishing
boats
generally.
While
,
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the
number
of
tunas
caught gradually rose over the years, the figure for
swordfishes
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swordfish
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and the
quantity
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number
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of
boats
used in
fishing
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industry have
the
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a
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similar tendency.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words tunas, swordfishes, number, boats, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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