In many countries nowadays, young single people no longer stay with their parents until they are married, but leave to study or work somewhere else. Do you think this trend has more advantages or disadvantages?

Over the past decades, living far from family has become a new trend in the world. People have different views about
this
trend but I believe that it has more benefits than drawbacks. Moving to other places to work or study may induce people to be affected by some negative aspects of social life. Because of distance, parents can not control or give advice when they see something was wrong in the way you live. The young person is very hard to know who is bad, who is good.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
may fall in some useless joy from bad guys.
For example
, the percentage of students who skip class to play a game on the internet stores has increased in Hanoi city. Most of them are people whose family
is
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are
in the countryside. Parents can not stay beside them so they
can not
can not
cannot
manage their children closely.
That is
why it harms people.
However
, I would argue that these are outweighed by the advantages.
The young
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The younger
generation may be independent and flexible when they do not live with their parents. Everything they have to do by
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
, from the little things like washing dishes, cooking dinner
to
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with
the bigger things
such
as establishing a
time table
a schedule listing events and the times at which they will take place
timetable
, keeping balance in consumption.
Thus
, they can raise a sense of initiative.
For instance
, I have a friend who had lived with her parents until she got married and so many problems came to her.
Although
it was just little things like doing housework she could not control and always felt tired and stressed. Since
then
, her family has often had conflicts and debates.
That is
why depending on your parents may make you lose some huge benefit from independent life. In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages of
this
trend are more significant than the disadvantages because people may have more skills when they live without their parents.
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