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Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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There are different opinions about whether a
museum
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 is a recreation site or a
place
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 for education. In my viewpoint, I think that a
museum
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 is for both entertaining and educating purposes. On the one hand, a
museum
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 is regarded as a
place
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 for people and tourists entertaining. It is a tourist attraction with interesting and fascinating things that appeal to a range of people to come and enjoy these cool stuffs.
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, humans are fond of seeing new strange things which they have not seen before
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 as an old and dirty shoes of a soldier left from a combat or an ancient fossil of a mysterious species.
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, tourists can
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 have some new experiments like playing some
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game shows
 or doing some activities when participating an exhibition.
On the other hand
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, people consider a
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 as an
education
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educational
place
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 for learning purposes. As each item in a
museum
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 is emblematic of an event in the history, it represents for the tradition and the culture of a country or even the custom. By that, tourists have a chance to broaden the horizon of the history and origin of a country or they can listen to some of the explanations of a guide to learn more about the culture that they have not known before. A
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 is an
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ideal
idealized
idealistic
idea
place
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 for people to learn the history, culture and tradition of a country. In conclusion, I personally think that a
museum
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 is a great
place
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 for people to learn and
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entertaining
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entertain
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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