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The best way to travel is travel in a group led by a tour guide. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Travel industry
Suggestion
The travel industry
 has experienced a minor boom in the later part of the 20th century as more and more people are influenced towards tourism now-a-days. Some prefer the traditional way of travelling under a
tour
 guide, whereas due to advancement in technology, some crew of people manage travelling without the involvement of
tour
 guide. Owing to above raised matter, I partially agree with the statement as both has its own
prons
in favor of (an action or proposal etc.)
pros
 and cons. On one hand, travelling along with a
tour
 guide can be advantageous in many ways.
Firstly
,
tour
 guides are the local inhabitants that are well versed with their surroundings, traditions, customs, rituals, history and so on of their motherland.
Hence
, in their companionship, the traveller can have
dept
the extent downward or backward or inward
depth
 knowledge about the place.
Secondly
, these agents can direct tourist to the place where they could easily locate their own taste food, shelter and travellers from their native land.
For instance
, a holidaymaker from India, is always in search of Indian cuisines where
’re he goes
Suggestion
is he going
was he going
has he gone
was he gone
is he gone
.
On the other hand
, the advanced technology has
outweigh
Suggestion
outweighed
 the existence of
tour
 setters. Today, knowing about
history
Suggestion
the history
 of any place is easy to find on google, so that, the need of these agents is not felt.
Moreover
 the whole journey can be planned in advance on numerous applications. In conclusion, it can be confidently conveyed that, even though the
tour
 guides accompanies their customers in guiding
tourists
Suggestion
tourist
places but
Accept comma addition
places, but
 it has failed to overshadow the growth in popularity of technology in
tourism industry
Suggestion
the tourism industry
 to a certain extent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • organization
  • knowledgeable
  • itinerary
  • local customs
  • language barrier
  • freedom
  • flexibility
  • random
  • spontaneous
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