Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often argued that the talent of a

player

can justify his inappropriate

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

on the ground.

This

essay disagrees with

this

view.

Firstly

, it can create discord among

team

members.

Secondly

, it will send the wrong message to their audience, especially young audience. A match is not about an individual

player

. Though you may have a brilliant

player

in the

team

, he alone can’t win matches for you. A suitable coordination is the key to success for a

team

and

hence

team manager

Suggestion

the team manager

needs to show unbiased treatment to all players irrespective of any individual’s performance. The zero-tolerance policy will ensure that there is no space for a trouble creator in the

team

and will ensure that all players treat others with dignity.

For example

, recently the Australian Cricket

team

banned their top-performing captain on the account of ball tempering and sledging.

Sportspersons

have a huge fan-following and that includes youngsters. Because these supporters blindly follow their role models, they

also

mimic their actions in personal life which can create serious consequences for them.

For example

, after a recent clash between two senior players during the world cup match, their supporters

also

emulated the same action outside the ground and vandalized public properties. Police arrested all the offenders and imposed a heavy fine on them. In conclusion, there may be some supremely talented players in

sports but

Accept comma addition

sports, but

it is the

team

effort which makes history and we can’t defend the irresponsible actions of a star

player

Also

, players need to exhibit exemplary

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

along with their skills as there are millions of young eyes always watching / following them.

Hence

, in my opinion, trouble makers must be punished and their talent cannot be an excuse for condoning their bad behaviour.

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2Word repetition
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292 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

misbehave
professional sportsmen
role model
public figures
influence
performance
moral standards
media scrutiny
endorsements
personal brand
consistency
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