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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define?

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Most people agree that
money
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 cannot bring
happiness
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. Why is
happiness
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 difficult to define? How can people achieve
happiness
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?
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 Check the Essay Start Timer Many people believe that
money
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 cannot bring
happiness
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. I totally agree with
this
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 statement.
Although
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,
money
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 is
neccesery
absolutely essential
necessary
 to
live but
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live, but
 it cannot
gurantee
give surety or assume responsibility
guarantee
happiness
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.
Diffrent
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Different
 people have
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 meanings for
happiness
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 why it can be acquired by various ways. It is very hard to assign a fixed definition to
happiness
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 as each individual has his own reasons for being happy.
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, some people think real
happiness
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 is in becoming famous and earning huge amount of
money
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 whereas others find
happiness
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 in spending with their family and friends.
Happiness
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 is
internal state
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an internal state
 of mind and it comes through satisfaction brought by numerous things.
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, there are
alot
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a lot
 of ways to become happy. One way of achieving
happiness
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 is
work
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. For some people
work
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 is worship. They value job satisfaction more than
money
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.
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, many doctors
work
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 with organisations to help and save
poor people
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the poor people
 from various diseases. In
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 cases, doctors get
very low income
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a very low income
 but they acquire inner peace of mind.
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, they become happy because their skills are used to help others.
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, many people prefer to
work
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 in
thier
of them or themselves
their
 field of
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interests
 even at lower wages just to achieve
happiness
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.
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 to
this
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, a person can gain
happiness
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 in the company of his loved ones. If an individual remains surrounded by love and affection of his family members, he
become
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becomes
 happy and enjoys the life at its full.
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Besides
, good health is
also
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neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 to be in a state of complete
happiness
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 as we all know a sound mind lives in a sound body. To sum up,
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,
money
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 can bring a lot of materialistic things required for comfortable
life but
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life, but
 it cannot buy real
happiness
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 which can come through various things like job satisfaction, family's love, good health and many more.

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