The obesity rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many developed countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

It is evident from statistics that young adults between the age group 13 to 19 years tend to be overweight in industrially forward countries.There are various reasons responsible for
this
sudden upward graph. In my essay I will elaborate those factors and suggest solutions to it. Advertisement targeted for young adults about food products or non-alcoholic
drinks play
Suggestion
drinks, plays
drinks plays
a major role. These advertisements are portrayed in a way that will
brain-wash
persuade completely, often through coercion
brainwash
them
accept
take exception to
except
to the extent that eating that unhealthy cheese roll or aerated drink, will get them a
girl-friend
a girl or young woman with whom a man is romantically involved
girlfriend
or
boy-friend
a man who is the lover of a girl or young woman
boyfriend
.
Also
, they are misleading them by playing with their mindset of becoming a hero by strengthening them to jump from a cliff and coming out
unscrathed
not injured
unscathed
.
This
attitude created will drift them away from eating home made healthy food. Another reason, can be the burden of studies which cannot get them enough time
for
Suggestion
to
work out. Assignments and projects allocated to them come with a deadline, due to preference for exercising reduces.
Furthermore
, those tasks allocated are usually computer based with zero mobility. Monitoring and regulating misleading advertisements, and imposing heavy fines on firms by regulatory authority will stop displaying false information about food products and drinks.
Also
,
Accept space
,
encouraging teenagers to focus on exercising and helping them manage time efficiently by creating a committee in high schools.These committees can work one-on-one basis to understand them more.
Additionally
, tasks given by schools should be more practical involving physical movements with some degree of flexibility in submission time. Above solutions can definitely bring changes in the mentality of teenagers bringing the graph down in rich countries.

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