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The mass media have an adverse effect on moral standards. Do you agree or disagree? Write an essay (at least 350 words) to give your opinion.

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As a result
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 of the advancement of technology, it is easier than ever before for people to find themselves impressionable in the melting pot of
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 media, which is so diverse and inclusive regardless of its poor history of
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the foundation
. I firmly believe that
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 profound influence of
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 media on society, especially on moral
criterias
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
criteria
, is negative.
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 and foremost, social media is a virtual society where moral standards are uncontrollably distorted. Since
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 an environment is liberal, everyone has their right to make comments on any issue which is ultimately disorganized and chaotic.
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,
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 moral performance as “
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 justice” has turned out to seriously violate ethical standards. Take the US racism scandal “the deadly arrest of black crime George Floyd” as an example. In which event,
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 media has deeply involved, with thrilling violent image and triggering comments on the issue considerably exacerbated the situation, leading to one of the biggest opposing wave against racial discrimination in the history of the US and reputation of the national police agency ruined. Eventually, there has been growing evidence proving that the death of the above-mentioned black man was an unexpected result of the policeman’s effort to prevent the criminal from harming himself.
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,
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 media has been negatively taken advantage at an alarming rate, which severely infringes moral standards. To clarify, social media
platforms namely
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platforms, namely
 Facebook and Twitter contain
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 an abundant amount of information that it is usually beyond the law in terms of inaccuracy and adverse effects on media users, causing fatal damage to numbers of individuals and even destroying whole communities.
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, false belief of drinking medical alcohol as a remedy to Covid-19 has been uncontrollably popularized on social media for financial purposes, bringing
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the deaths
 to hundreds of Indian people.
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, it is not
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 media that should be totally blamed. Obviously,
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 media has been literally introduced to meet the demand of boundless interpersonal communication all over the world, and expecting more than current official attempts to put
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 under barely sufficient control is infeasible.
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, it is essential for individuals to take responsibility for being excessively gullible and impressionable to hardly selective information and extreme events. In conclusion,
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 media has done
dramatical
in a very impressive manner
dramatically
 harm to moral
criterias
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
criteria
creatures
.
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, it is self-awareness and wisdom that prevent the negative effect of
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 media from eating away at initial ethical standards.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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